Human Atomics
We're in a room, hitting the walls
We're in a room, hitting the walls
The worlds not round its like a hall,
People can't breathe, they're walking the walls
Their ideas keep crashing and having fights.
If only one of them could see the light
The hall's so long and people can't see,
Their ideas so small they need to be freed !
Lets knock down the wall,
So people can see, let their ideas breathe,
Then hopefully they'll see the worlds much bigger
And its not just me !
love this,
ReplyDeletebrilliant writing,
The hall's so long and people can't see,
Their ideas so small they need to be freed !
Lets knock down the wall,
So people can see,let their ideas breathe,
powerful........
The worlds not round its like a hall...
ReplyDeleteThe hall's so long and people can't see..
wonderful thought... luv the simile
nice msg too
Nice message. See the wider picture.
ReplyDeleteoh my god! this is so very good! i love the strength in the words! keep it up!
ReplyDeleteplease check mine too: "Beyond Silent Wars"
what a beautiful and powerful poem! yes, if only one of us could see the light...
ReplyDeletethanks for your nice comment on my blog. :)
Sounds like the words of an orator.
ReplyDeleteGood going!
beautiful concept and thought! well written! :)
ReplyDeleteRally Week 41 - My Poetry
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ReplyDeleteI choose..
D. All the above!
you wonderful poet you!
Luna
http://lunawitch15.wordpress.com/
Life sure is a shape shifter, straight and twisting roads. I love the concept here!
ReplyDeletewelcome join us again.
ReplyDeletewill place your link in our blog roll within a week.
super busy these 3 days.
smiles.
A++
Tear down the walls as the song says. I enjoyed this Kerry. Thank you
ReplyDeleteRhyme and free verse blend together for an informal structure here--thanks for linking up and participating today, Kerry.
ReplyDeletenicely played, why do we fight? is it the walls we create that narrow our perspective to a hall...i like this...
ReplyDeleteMay the hyper-active collisions come to an end! Wonderful write, the tempo and architecture flowed wonderfully. ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteLove this. We should always be out there trying to knock down walls! :-)
ReplyDeleteFabuloud!
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