Final Insult
Today was the day I was stripped bare,
Cruel words you said as if you didn't care,
You verbally whipped every part of my soul,
Torturing my heart till it ran cold.
So here you leave me all alone!
My spirit dying!
No longer on my throne,
Mentally crying!
Cos of the love of another you've shown.
The void that you've left never to be filled,
For every sweet feeling, I ever had you have killed,
Anger, Sorrow, Hate is all I can feel.
So here you leave me all alone,
My spirit dying!
No longer on my throne,
Mentally crying !
Cos of the love of another you have shown.
Tender words or a soft caress,
Can't heal or make my pain less,
Forever to live in this perpetual nightmare,
So whose to blame for stripping me bare?
You the one who promised he'd always care!
So here I am all alone,
My spirit dead!
No longer on my throne,
My tears all shed
Cos of the love of another you've been shown
For a poem inspired by a song ...Tainted Love by Soft Cell inspired this !
I love the title. The poem itself has a wonderful flow, perfectly conveys a sense of betrayal and pain and is beautifully written
ReplyDeleteperfect rhyming,
ReplyDeletewell done.
:)
a hard read and haunting...the feelings we get when our love turns to another...that betrayal leaves you cold and sour...
ReplyDeletea sad betrayal...nice!
ReplyDeleteI love that song. There are lots of musically inspired posts out there right now. This one a little sad, but sweetheart, You don't need it if that is the way you are going to be treated!
ReplyDeleteSaad but beaautiful write. Very heart-wrenching. Nicely done!
ReplyDeletehttp://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/two-yearning-heart/
sad, well done.
ReplyDeleteYes it is so sad when they leave you for another and you have really captured this so well it is a painful thing to watch
ReplyDeletehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/#comment-1370
powerful expression on lost love.
ReplyDeleteit does happen to many,
Dear Kez
ReplyDeleteVery evocative and emotionally charged... in such simple words... i liked it and I could relate to it so much... like your words...
'You verbally whipped every part of my soul,'
Thanks for sharing such a lovely verse and for joining in the Poetry Picnic … Look forward to your posts on “Friends, Relationships and every one around..” next week …
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html